BETA Second Life

Thank you for reading Second Life.

Here is a spot for you Beta readers. I imagine it might be too soon for some of you to comment in depth, but if you wanted to leave initial reactions, I suggest scrolling to the bottom without reading others, leaving your mark and then peruse. I have included some of my thoughts too.

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Second Life came close to the garbage pin. It's since become a story I love (same is true with Virtual Heaven). My biological father worked at Area 51. I only lived with him for 6-9 weeks when I was twelve. Those years impacted me greatly and this story originated in a conspiracy-loving neighbor's living room. My father would say cryptic things about UFO rumors, condescending, but with authority. It inspired this piece.

When I write, I must have the ending, then I free flow a rough draft, taking notes, doing a chapter or so each day. This ending excited me to no ends, but as I flushed out the story, I worried about the emotional bond, if it could write love correctly. I worried romance instead of traditional conflict in a pretty hard sci-fi novella would torpedo interest.

I guess we will find out, together. 

4 Comments on “BETA Second Life

  1. Taylor,

    I agree with Melody in that this draft was a bit rushed; however, I found your writing-style engaging, and story compelling. I wanted to know what was going on on Salinge, and more so the underlying physics or intent of the invented “afterlife”.

    There were a few questions left unanswered (unless I missed it, why do they forget aspects of their former lives?), but the point of fiction isn’t always to tie off every loose end.

    I think you can get away without making direct reference to Area 51 and Roswell and all that. Personally, I think this would provide a more wholesome ending to the story. I would be thinking along the lines of reincarnation or some benevolent deity. Leaving it more open-ended may be a better approach to a short story. I find that the best short stories are those that introduce an idea, then allow the reader to tackle it within their own minds. For me, short stories are there to inspire.

    On the topic of “rushing”. You don’t need to turn this into a novel. I think there are certain parts you can draw out to add to make the conflict tenser. Also, you may want to hint at the physics or forces behind this strange “afterlife” with some additional clues and interactions on Salinge.

    Just some ideas here. Most of my notes you will find in the edited document.

    Overall, I thoroughly enjoyed the story, and feel that is was far more engaging than Virtual Heaven (bearing in mind I am about 1/8 through Virtual Heaven, ha!).

    Kind regards,

    Nick Petrou

  2. I felt the entire piece was rushed, but it did have a decent plot to it. I got a bit confused when Judy tells Scott that “…all but the worst of us reanimate on Salinge,”. I misread it as ‘all of the worst of us’ and had to go back and check when she says “We still get the occasional bad seeds,” etc. Also, the Wizard of Oz allusion could have been worded better. It’s not the greatest thing I’ve ever read, but it’s not terrible.

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